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How to write with style
8 non-obvious insights from the master of personality
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Last week, I finished a polished draft of the fantasy novel that’s consumed my brain for the past year. Think Red Rising meets the Magicians — a dark story about power and what we'll sacrifice to get it.
As I figure out this wild publishing business, I’m looking to connect with literary agents who represent commercial, adult fantasy. Any chance that’s you or someone you know? If so, I’d love to chat (you can reply directly to this newsletter).
I’m writing a piece on what I’ve learned and the many mistakes made. But, for now, onto the good stuff…
You know how some writers are instantly recognizable, even without their name on the page? You read a couple sentences and you know it’s them. No question about it. Nobody else sounds quite the same. I’ve always been jealous of folks who have that knack. It’s an incredible skill, and one I’m working to build.
Recently, I stumbled across a very short Kurt Vonnegut paragraph that only he could write. Here’s the paragraph (from Cat’s Cradle):
“She hated people who thought too much. At that moment, she struck me as an appropriate representative for almost all mankind.”
In two sentences, Vonnegut makes you laugh, think, and wince at how accurately he's nailed something about human nature. He does this over and over throughout his work, sliding from humor to insight so smoothly you barely notice the shift until it hits you in the face.
I don’t bring Vonnegut up randomly. He’s one of the most distinctive storytellers to ever live, and he gave us many of his ideas on “how to write with style.”
These stick with me because, while most writing guides obsess over grammar and structure, Vonnegut focuses on something far more important — how to make your writing distinctively yours.
Let’s look at his ideas.
Vonnegut’s 8 rules for writing with style:
1. Find a subject you care about
Find a subject you care about and which you in your heart feel others should care about. It is this genuine caring, and not your games with language, which will be the most compelling and seductive element in your style.
I am not urging you to write a novel, by the way -although 1 would not be sony if you wrote one, provided you genuinely cared about something. A petition to the mayor about a pothole in front of your house or a love letter to the girl next door will do.
2. Do not ramble, though
I won't ramble on about that.
3. Keep it simple
As for your use of language: Remember that two great masters of language, William Shakespeare and James Joyce, wrote sentences which were almost childlike when their subjects were most profound. ‘To be or not to be?’ asks Shakespeare’s Hamlet. The longest word is three letters long. Joyce, when he was frisky, could put together a sentence as intricate and as glittering as a necklace for Cleopatra, but my favorite sentence in his short story ‘Eveline’ is just this one: ‘She was tired.’ At that point in the story, no other words could break the heart of a reader as those three words do.
Simplicity of language is not only reputable, but perhaps even sacred. The Bible opens with a sentence well within the writing skills of a lively fourteen-year-old: ‘In the beginning God created the heaven and earth.’
4. Have the guts to cut
It may be that you, too, are capable of making necklaces for Cleopatra, so to speak. But your eloquence should be the servant of the ideas in your head. Your rule might be this: If a sentence, no matter how excellent, does not illuminate your subject in some new and useful way, scratch it out.
5. Sound like yourself
The writing style which is most natural for you is bound to echo the speech you heard when a child. English was the novelist Joseph Conrad’s third language, and much that seems piquant in his use of English was no doubt colored by his first language, which was Polish. And lucky indeed is the writer who has grown up in Ireland, for the English spoken there is so amusing and musical. I myself grew up in Indianapolis, where common speech sounds like a band saw cutting galvanized tin, and employs a vocabulary as unornamental as a monkey wrench.
All these varieties of speech are beautiful, just as the varieties of butterflies are beautiful. No matter what your first language, you should treasure it all your life. If it happens not to be standard English, and it shows itself when you write standard English, the result is usually delightful, like a very pretty girl with one eye that is green and one that is blue.
I myself find that I trust my own writing most, and others seem to trust it most, too, when I sound most like a person from Indianapolis, which is what I am. What alternatives do I have? The one most vehemently recommended by teachers has no doubt been pressed on you, as well: to write like cultivated Englishmen of a century or more ago.
6. Say what you mean to say
I used to be exasperated by such teachers, but am no more. I understand now that all those antique essays and stories with which I was to compare my own work were not magnificent for their datedness or foreignness, but for saying precisely what their authors meant them to say. My teachers wished me to write accurately, always selecting the most effective words, and relating the words to one another unambiguously, rigidly, like parts of a machine. The teachers did not want to turn me into an Englishman after all. They hoped that I would become understandable — and therefore understood. And there went my dream of doing with words what Pablo Picasso did with paint or what any number of jazz idols did with music. If I broke all the rules of punctuation, had words mean whatever I wanted them to mean, and strung them together higgledly-piggledy, I would simply not be understood. So you, too, had better avoid Picasso-style or jazz-style writing if you have something worth saying and wish to be understood.
Readers want our pages to look very much like pages they have seen before. Why? This is because they themselves have a tough job to do, and they need all the help they can get from us.
7. Pity the readers
Readers have to identify thousands of little marks on paper, and make sense of them immediately. They have to read, an art so difficult that most people don’t really master it even after having studied it all through grade school and high school — twelve long years.
So this discussion must finally acknowledge that our stylistic options as writers are neither numerous nor glamorous, since our readers are bound to be such imperfect artists. Our audience requires us to be sympathetic and patient teachers, ever willing to simplify and clarify, whereas we would rather soar high above the crowd, singing like nightingales.
8. For really detailed advice… go read The Elements of Style
For a discussion of literary style in a narrower sense, a more technical sense, I commend to your attention The Elements of Style, by Strunk, Jr., and E. B. White. E. B.
I’ve found these ideas helpful but sometimes tough to keep in mind unless I have them up as I’m writing. That doesn’t happen too often.
So, I want to give you one more simple idea that helps me a lot. But, fair warning, it may sound stupid upon first read. Here it is: Pretend you’re writing to a loved one. Literally put “Dear son” or whomever hits home for you at the top of what you’re working on.
I’ve found this one mental trick helps me find a certain authenticity in my writing. When I’m done, I simply remove that intro, because keeping it in would be weird, and ship the piece.
Have an awesome Sunday,
Nathan
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Trivia — A Sentence I Wish I Wrote
Here’s a line I’d call emblematic of its writer’s style. What book does it come from? Tap your best guess.
"It’s a very difficult era in which to be a person, just a real, actual person, instead of a collection of personality traits selected from an endless Automat of characters." |
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